Revising Your City-State Paragraphs

Now that you have 5 big paragraphs describing the Ancient Greek city-state, you can revise them! There are THREE revisions you need to make in your 5 paragraphs.

1. Self or Peer Review your paragraphs for Ideas, Support, & Organization. Get the yellow and purple review sheets from Heather. This should make your draft all colorful with pink, green, and blue.
   
2. Change all your verbs in the simple past. Reference the table in your Humanities notebook. Remember your city-state was in the past, in Ancient Greece! All you need to do is cross off the old verbs and write in the past tenses. DO NOT REWRITE YOUR FIRST DRAFT!
   
3. Change all first person sentences into third person sentences. For example, "I decided to have . . . " into "The government/city-state decided to . . . " OR "My city-state is located in . . . " to "The city-state of Heatheropolis is located in . . ."

At this point, your first draft should look like a big mess. That means you're ready to start typing! Remember your USB drive!